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Laying in terror, blankets of darkness with dreams
Kicking and twitching, while I'm screaming in silence
Trapped in this bed twirling with violence
Fall out of thought seconds before dawn
Struggling for air as a stare the wall
Damp soft breaths over and over
Slowly fade off as I go back under
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A short poem I wrote once, after waking from a nightmare relating to a personal event I was going through during that time

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~Invoking Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. I can feel almost a sense if isolation or incarceration from this. I like it.
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~Purplellamacake Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this is awesome :O
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*BiscuitDude Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While I don't recall having night terrors, I've had night hallucinations which have caused me panic and distress. I do like this, short, instant and to the point, reminding me of some horrible child nightmares I vaguely recall too.
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:iconaylee95:
It's really really good and I love it. :D
If anything I would have changed the last line to
"Slowly fade off as I go back under"
and take out the word, "again"
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~Miskle Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the feedback, yeah it's a few years old and I just posted it un-edited. Thanks for the idea and tbh I'm going to change it to just that. Thanks :dummy:
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:iconaylee95:
:) you're welcome, glad I could help :D
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~AlexsPlushies Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hate nightmares that give you such a scare :(
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*Marian-ette Sep 5, 2012  Student Writer
I've felt this. Whatever it meant to you when you wrote this, I've felt these feelings. Thanks for writing this.
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~Miskle Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, thank you :dummy:
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Mood: Love *Walldryx45 Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Gorgeous Colors :D I love it !
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